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so i spent weeks working on the first four chapters of One Dreams

the first chap was the Foolish One eating baby Junah’s lacking, the second was the Unseen Council (which i’d moved from later in the story), the third was a brand new chapter with the Gray Wolf tasking Nih’o to kill the kids, and then of course, Nih’o killing the kids and Naming Junah

anyway, things weren’t going very well because i couldn’t seem to get the right amount of information into those first chapters without major info dumping, and having the first four chapters so spirit heavy made it seem like the story was going to focus on them as main characters, and even my mom—who’s an intelligent, experienced reader—felt like they didn’t really work. i was trying to force the chapters because i’d grown attached to them. so i did what any responsible writer would do

i cut them

it felt good

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spookyspectrumsid asked:
*shimmies back into the inbox* It's probably an oddly specific question, but regarding Junah's (nonexistent) clothes when he's being beaten in by Hame, is it an actual (probably filthy and torn up) petticoat skirt? Or is it just a piece of fabric that barely passes as a skirt? And how long is it and what color (if any)? Just out of curiosity.

in my revisions i’ve changed the petticoat to a simple cloth piece. so now it’s a piece of fabric that barely passes as a skirt. it does down to about his knees, and is a nasty gray color—because of filth, no idea what color it was originally—and is very thin. whatever it was originally it was probably pretty and fine because it’s not holding up that well now

you can give it a pattern if you like

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urulokid:

millika:

Who’s Alex?

Billboard demonstrating gender stereotypes as most people automatically assume that Alex is the boy.

Actually, I’ve studied design and advertising, and I can tell you that the reason people would look at this and immediately assume Alex is the boy is because, quite simply, the boy is the focal point of the ad.

English-speaking readers’ line of sight goes from left to right and up to down. This ad leads the viewer from the words MEET ALEX etc straight to the boy and then over and down to the girl. I didn’t even notice there was a set of parenthesis with words in them in the ad until I looked the fourth time. 

This is a fallacious confirmation bias, as anyone looking at it will assume Alex is the focal point (i.e. The Boy) and then if they’re perceptive they’ll notice the words at the bottom. Aha! Those damn gender stereotypes gotcha again! Except no, because the ad literally forces you to read it as “Alex is the boy” by the visual language and lines of sight. 

A better ad would have been structured from top to bottom instead of left to right, and wouldn’t have pushed the girl, the real subject of the ad (who, by the way, has been VISUALLY PUSHED OUT OF HER RIGHTFUL SPACE ON THE AD BY HER BROTHER) off to the corner as far away from her identifiers as possible. 

Here, I’ll make you a better ad.

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Bam. Shitty stock photo but you get the point. If anyone sees this and assumes Alex is the boy, they don’t have the the ad layout to use as an excuse for their internalized gender shittery. Likewise, the ad isn’t actively trying to make you read it a certain way and THEN making you feel guilty for interpreting it the way they designed it to be. 

urulokid:

millika:

Who’s Alex?

Billboard demonstrating gender stereotypes as most people automatically assume that Alex is the boy.

Actually, I’ve studied design and advertising, and I can tell you that the reason people would look at this and immediately assume Alex is the boy is because, quite simply, the boy is the focal point of the ad.

English-speaking readers’ line of sight goes from left to right and up to down. This ad leads the viewer from the words MEET ALEX etc straight to the boy and then over and down to the girl. I didn’t even notice there was a set of parenthesis with words in them in the ad until I looked the fourth time. 

This is a fallacious confirmation bias, as anyone looking at it will assume Alex is the focal point (i.e. The Boy) and then if they’re perceptive they’ll notice the words at the bottom. Aha! Those damn gender stereotypes gotcha again! Except no, because the ad literally forces you to read it as “Alex is the boy” by the visual language and lines of sight. 

A better ad would have been structured from top to bottom instead of left to right, and wouldn’t have pushed the girl, the real subject of the ad (who, by the way, has been VISUALLY PUSHED OUT OF HER RIGHTFUL SPACE ON THE AD BY HER BROTHER) off to the corner as far away from her identifiers as possible. 

Here, I’ll make you a better ad.

image

Bam. Shitty stock photo but you get the point. If anyone sees this and assumes Alex is the boy, they don’t have the the ad layout to use as an excuse for their internalized gender shittery. Likewise, the ad isn’t actively trying to make you read it a certain way and THEN making you feel guilty for interpreting it the way they designed it to be. 


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spookyspectrumsid asked:
*Nonchalantly slides into the askbox* The Foolish One has the appearance of a gray fox correct? Not that I need the info or anything...

why yes, it does indeed.

a cute, little, pissed off gray fox :D

which reminds me actually, would you like to read the revisions i’ve made to the story? it’s starting off a bit different than before and i need to make sure information is clear as to what the lacking is, what namings are (at least partial understanding here), and what’s going on in the story’s beginning. i’ve workshopped it a bit already and some readers are like super confused. want to make sure the confusion is consistent

would you be interested?

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making so much awesome progress on One Dreams' reboot. might post teasers this weekend

watch for them!

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People who write about gender politics have wildly differing opinions on Amy: some see her as a blisteringly alive, sickly fascinating character who’s both a monstrous manipulator and a brilliant commentator, particularly on gender politics in relationships. Others see her as, by the end, a cartoon, living down to every silly idea about women as naturally devious shrews who arrange pregnancies to get their own way and pretend they have been abused when they have not.

What has always kept Amy from troubling me in this particular sense is that she does the things she does not because they are in her nature as a woman, but because they are in her nature as a psychopath. One of the problems with the relative paucity of interesting female characters is that they become responsible for representing all women, for speaking to What Women Are Like. The more scantly represented any demographic group is, the more each person seems to reflect upon everyone. But here, it has always been perfectly clear that Amy is an aberration. She is a woman, but she is not only a woman. She is also a monster, and the second half of Fincher’s film is, in many ways, a horror movie about the great difficulty — and eventually the impossibility — of defeating her. She is the rare monster in a monster movie who wins at the end. Whatever she has to do, however offensive, however distasteful, however horrifying. Whatever.

It is in Amy’s specific, defined character that she will do anything. She is that smart, that angry, and that unfettered by conscience. It would not be realistic to suggest that she, given the person she is made out to be, would not do these things, would not think of these things. It is not her lack of conscience or her ruthlessness that is gendered; it is the way she expresses those things as a result of her very much gendered life. Amy’s pathology plays out in the fields of marriage and childbirth because that is where she sees herself having a chance to attain power. That’s where the high stakes are, and a person as angry and intelligent as Amy knows how to locate the highest possible stakes.


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okay so didn’t have Rye’s first scene figured out

but think that’s because i had him going the wrong direction

instead of into the upper levels, he should be coming to the Basement. cause Junah doesn’t go up. wouldn’t make any sense for him to, what with all the contempt and fear of the Basement and all

might finally have something going now

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dannyrandy:

i can’t believe people get so angry about a bisexual spider-man. whatever. have your shitty bi/homophobic opinions. you’re an asshole anyway. i just can’t believe you’re robbing everyone of all the glorious ‘swings both ways’ jokes


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think i’m finally getting Rye’s first scene under control

the world building had taken over a scene that was already suffering from lack of action. now it’s quicker, tighter, and also more realistic to the fact that he’s an exile and all

am also working on a few more small chapters/scenes for the beginning, so won’t have anything new up until they’re all done or else the progression will be wonky

tho am considering taking old chapters down right now and putting up the revised ones i have gotten done. sort of a restart on the story

not sure tho

thoughts?

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wow got so much great information from my sensei last night. things that’ll be awesome for world building in One Dreams

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mayflyofspace:

communistwomanifesto:

mayflyofspace:

communistwomanifesto:

why

the amazon page says that it’s a collection of late 18th century pamphlets. they have been reprinted (with contextual information by modern historians) so that students and academics can get a sense of how late 18th century people argued about the morality of slavery, which is vital for understanding how slavery was perpetuated and justified in the western world. it has literally nothing to do with advocating slavery in the modern age.

similar collections exist for other subjects such as sexism, colonialism, anti-Catholicism etc. not because the publishers want to support such positions but because reading primary source material is the most important way of understanding a historical topic - in the same way that a fragment of pottery or a bone can tell us about the archaeology of a period - and modern sourcebooks make original documents accessible to students who don’t have access to archives or the necessary language or paleographical skills to read the originals.

^^^ important clarification (many other people have made said point but this is the most detailed i think?)

ah thanks! I saw you made that post a while ago so I didn’t want to send you an ask in case you’d already been swamped under (I’ve been in that boat before, made a factual error in a post and had people sending me messages correcting me about it for weeks).

mayflyofspace:

communistwomanifesto:

mayflyofspace:

communistwomanifesto:

why

the amazon page says that it’s a collection of late 18th century pamphlets. they have been reprinted (with contextual information by modern historians) so that students and academics can get a sense of how late 18th century people argued about the morality of slavery, which is vital for understanding how slavery was perpetuated and justified in the western world. it has literally nothing to do with advocating slavery in the modern age.

similar collections exist for other subjects such as sexism, colonialism, anti-Catholicism etc. not because the publishers want to support such positions but because reading primary source material is the most important way of understanding a historical topic - in the same way that a fragment of pottery or a bone can tell us about the archaeology of a period - and modern sourcebooks make original documents accessible to students who don’t have access to archives or the necessary language or paleographical skills to read the originals.

^^^ important clarification (many other people have made said point but this is the most detailed i think?)

ah thanks! I saw you made that post a while ago so I didn’t want to send you an ask in case you’d already been swamped under (I’ve been in that boat before, made a factual error in a post and had people sending me messages correcting me about it for weeks).

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